Revise your Thought Exercise.
It should be in PERFECT MLA format.
It should have 2 GOOD 8 sentence Schaffer paragraphs.
Avoid BE verbs.
Revise sentences that say "This matters because..."
Revise "you" sentences. You don't mean Mrs. Phippen.
Revise "we." Do you mean The Reader, The Author, etc.? Who do you mean?
Be specific.
Avoid generalities. Choose specific words. Don't use "great, awesome, wonderful."
